Saiyan Age War Part 1

Not to long ago, I started this story. It's called, "The Saiyjin Age War". I'm only done with the first chapter, but I would greatly appriciate it, if you guy's would read it and tell me what I should do to make it better. It's kinda hard to understand at first, so you really have to pay attention to what you are reading. Well, here it goes.

Kovell watched the yellow and orange sun rise over the horizon. She hadn’t slept for hours. Excitement had gotten the best of her, but excited about what? Kovell, herself, couldn’t really answer this.

“Today is the day. I’ve been waiting for this and now I’ll finally have my chance, my chance to make a future, and maybe, find my past.” Kovell slowly lifted herself off her bay window. Laying on her bed was a blue body suit with white and gold armor. “Time to alter this old thing. I have to make it look like it’s Ashina material or else they’ll never know which side I’m on. But, I want to keep some of it like it is, so everyone knows that I’m in the saiy-jin military outfit.” Kovell said picking up the blue suit. “Good thing this is spandex!” Kovell chuckled. Suddenly her expression changed. She looked at the suit and tears came to her eyes. The only past she had was that suit, it was the first thing given to her before she was taken away. “I’m not going to think of it as losing my past. I’m going to think of it as making a better future.” She said.

The time Kovell lives in is a bleak one. A war is raging that has been going on 67 years now. It all started a long time ago when Prince Vegeta had envisioned a more perfect universe. With the help of Son Goku, Prince Vegeta took control of the universe and gave it to Son Gotenks, the very first ruler of the universe. King Gotenks was the best ruler the universe had ever seen. Everything was going great until it came time to announce the air to the thrown. That’s really when the war began. Since Gotenks was actually Son Goku and Prince Vegeta’s two sons fused together, there was debate over whether to give the universe to Son Goku’s blood line, or Prince Vegeta’s blood line. It was a tough decision for King Gotenks to decide, but the day before he was to announce his decision, he mysteriously died. After that, Prince Vegeta and Son Goku’s vision of a perfect existence was smashed. A ruler stepped up being of Son Goku’s blood line, but followers of Prince Vegeta assassinated that ruler, her name was Princess Pan. After that, Prince Vegeta’s blood line took over the thrown. Eventually Vegeta’s bloodline created the Ulatie Empire. The Ulatie Empire was cruel. Their first step to what they thought was a perfect nation was to create an all saiy-jin populated universe. To do this they would have to “breed” the saiy-jins. So they took any saiyjins there were, Goku’s blood line, or Vegeta’s blood line and made them have at least ten children with a human mate. Then they separated the saiy-jin children from their parents at birth and killed all the other human babies. These children were given saiy-jin uniforms, but nothing else. That way it was thought by the Empire that if the saiy-jins did not know anything of their pasts, they would not rebel. However, the Empire was stupid and only “breed” Goku’s bloodline for slave labor. Eventually, all those of Prince Vegeta’s line were to stay on one planet. Son Goku’s blood line were sent to a mining planet. That was until one year when one man stepped up to take new leadership of the universe. He told the people of their pasts and claimed he was going to set things straight, that was until the Ulatie counsel heard of this. They killed this only hope for peace. After he was killed, Goku’s bloodline formed the Ashina Nation . That’s when the fighting began. The Ashina Nation allowed humans to live and start rebuilding, but they had to keep taking the saiy-jin children away because of their uniqueness. They were the best chance the Ashina Nation had of winning, and that’s where Kovell’s timeline comes into focus. The war has been raging for 67 years now and has been named the Saiy-jin Age War.

Kovell lifted up her newly redone suit. “Perfect! It looks great. I knew I could do it! Now for the finishing touch.” Kovell picked up a can of orange paint and a paint brush. Slowly she stroked the orange paint on the white breast plate of the armor. “Finished! I’d say this looks like Ashina material!” On the armor she had painted an orange dragonball with 3 stars. “This way they’ll know I’m in the third regiment of saiy-jins.” Kovell walked over to her closet and pulled out a small book bag. “I may need some clothes to rest in and some PJ’s. I can’t very well sleep in my armor!” Kovell laughed and started packing. She had just zipped the zipper closed when she heard her doorbell ring. “I’m coming!” Kovell quickly flung the book bag over her shoulder and ran down the stairs. She opened the door to see her best friend Ritina standing there. Ritina was of Vegeta’s blood line, but she crossed over because she knew what the Ulatie Empire was doing was wrong. Ritina had on her saiy-jin armor and blue suit, but she had no bag. “Ritina! Where’s all your stuff! This ship is going to be leaving soon!” Kovell yelled at her friend and dragged her inside.

“I bought some capsules, so all my stuff is in my pocket. I have a few extra if you want one. Anyway, why are you yelling at me when you don’t even have your suit on?” Ritina asked looking at her friend.

“Oh yeah. I’m sorry. I guess its just because I’m so excited, I mean, aren’t you nervous? You know, they say that sometimes Master Gregory wont train his students if he thinks they are too weak.” Kovell asked her friend quickly running up to her room.

“Yeah, I know. I hear this guy was trained by the same guy that trained Son Goku, what’s his name? Oh yeah, it was King Kai. I can’t believe that we were hand picked by the Ashina Nation to be trained by Master Gregory. I guess I’m excited too, but only because this guy is supposed to be the best.” Ritina said.

“He is the best.” Kovell said walking down the stairs in her saiy-jin outfit. “I can understand why you don’t think he is the best, though. I know he is small, and very old, but I just know he is the best.” Kovell walked over and picked up a capsule. She opened it up and threw it on the ground next to her book bag. Suddenly the bag was gone and the only thing left there was the capsule. She picked it up and stuffed it in her pocket. “Thanks Ritina. This capsule really came in handy.” Kovell said opening up her front door. “Ready to go?” She asked.

“I’m always ready.” Ritina said walking out the door. Kovell closed and locked the door to her tiny apartment.

“Good bye home.” Kovell said. She turned around and ran after Ritina.

“Kovell, do you know how lucky you are? After we get done with our training, you get to go to Planet Namek and I have to stay here. You wont even have to fight. I, on the other hand, will be on the front line. I can’t believe you were picked to be ambassador to Planet Namek.” Ritina said as they walked toward the ship.

“Yeah. I can’t wait to meet the Nameks. As for that fighting thing, I think you’re the lucky one. Do you know how many Ulatie soldiers will be on Planet Namek? Probably thousands, and there will only be ten of us. Trust me, I’ll be fighting.” Kovell said.

“Why do you think there will be that many Ulatie soldiers there?” Ritina asked her friend.

“They’ll be there for the same reason we’ll be there. Whomever gets the Nameks to fight on their side has the upper hand in the war. The Ulatie Empire knows this, and they also know that we’re sending ambassadors. They probably have a ton of soldiers there to fight us off so they can force the Nameks to fight.” Kovell said.

“Wow. Maybe I am the lucky one!” Ritina and Kovell both laughed. The road seemed to last forever. Both Kovell and Ritina were afraid of what would happen to them. The road stretched up a hill over which would be the ship that would take them to their future. Kovell was especially nervous because of what she had to do.

“What if I can’t do what they asked me to do?” Kovell asked nervously. “I mean, what if I mess up and cause us the whole war?” Kovell asked again, but before Ritina could answer they had reached the top of the hill. Below them lay the entire Ashina base. In the middle was a large black ship with a giant red-orange dragonball. This dragonball had no stars, however.

“That’s strange.” Ritina said. “Why doesn’t that dragonball have any stars?” Ritina looked over to her friend, Kovell.

“That ship is the best ship there is. Most ships get one star each time they successfully complete a mission. Yet this ship has been through so many missions, they named it the Starless and left the dragonball blank.” Kovell said, her eyes glued to this magnificent ship. Both saiy-jins began to walk toward the ship. The Starless looked as though it had been in many battles. On the sides were dents and scrapes from narrow escapes. The Starless was indeed a grand ship.

“We are so lucky Ritina. Do you know that the Ulatie has been trying to steal this ship away from us for years, and for years the Starless has been alluding them.” Kovell said grabbing Ritina’s arm. “So you mean that we might be attacked by Ulatie ships that are trying to steal this? Great. I feel safer already.” Ritina said sarcastically. They almost walked onto the ship until a large man stopped them. He had blonde hair that was wildly pointed upward. His eyes were blue green, but he had no aura around him.

“A master?! I’m so sorry sir!” Ritina said dropping her head in respect. Kovell quickly did the same. The man gently tapped Ritina on the shoulder.

“What did you call me?” The man said. Ritina looked at him a little afraid of if she was in trouble or not.

“I called you a master sir. It is clear that you have mastered your skills as a saiy-jin. You can stay a super saiy-jin all the time, and never get tired or use all your energy. The first two to achieve this was Prince Gohan and Son Goku. So your a master sir.” Ritina said trying to speak with respect.

“You’ve done your history. All officers must achieve mastery of their saiy-jin skills before becoming commanders.” The man said. “I’m Commander Hail. I’m commander of old Starless here. As long as you’re on my ship you will obey my orders. You two must be the two saiy-jins headed to Gregory’s planet. That’s all fine and good, but you guy’s need to sign on over there before you get on the ship.” Commander Hail said. Kovell looked at this man standing in front of her.

“He doesn’t look so tough” Kovell whispered to Ritina. Soon they were on their way back to the sign on table.

“What do you mean not so tough? He’s a master of the super saiy-jin art. Do you think you could beat him?! Ha! I doubt that would ever happen.” Ritina laughed.

“No. I don’t think I could beat him, per-say. I’m just saying he looks too gentle to hurt anyone. Well, he might hurt a Ulatie soldier, but that’s different.” Kovell and Ritina both laughed. They both got in line to sign on to the ship. The line was pretty long, with a lot of different people waiting to sign on. There was one woman who was so fat that she had no armor. “Look at her! She’s so fat, I bet she couldn’t find armor that would fit!” Kovell giggled.

“Hush Kovell! You’re going to get us in trouble.” Ritina said, jabbing Kovell in the side with her elbow. “You’re going to get our asses kicked, and on the very first day!” Ritina said, smiling.

“I’m sorry. It’s just that some of these people have the weirdest hair styles, and, well, they just look so funny!” Kovell said, giggling again.

“Kovell, you don’t know when to cut it out do you?” Ritina asked, shaking her head. Eventually they were one person away from signing on.

“Jade Hiosu.” The guy in front of them said quietly while signing his name. “Third regiment saiy-jins. To…” He stopped for a minute.

“To Master Gregory’s.” Ritina said stepping next to him.

“Oh yeah. Thanks. I’m Jade.” He said.

“I’m Ritina. I’m headed to Master Gregory’s too.” Ritina said as Jade handed her the pen. Jade had black hair that was cut spiky at the top. He looked a lot like Son Goku and Ritina was very attracted to him.

“That’s nice. Hey, is it okay if I hang with you and your friend, er…”

“Kovell.” Kovell said extending her hand. Jade promptly shook her hand and looked at Ritina.

“Kovell. Well, I don’t know anyone here, so is it okay if I stay with you guy’s?” Jade asked while Ritina signed her name.

“Sure. We don’t mind if you want to stay with us.” Kovell said. “Where are you headed after you get done with training?” Kovell asked. She started signing her name.

“I’m headed to the front line. Sucks, doesn’t it? I really didn’t want to go there. I’d rather be fighting where the real battles are going to be.” Jade said as they started to walk toward the ship.

“Where would the real battles be?” Ritina asked. She was real interested in Jade, and she didn’t know it, but he was interested in her too.

“Planet Namek. I so wish I was picked to be one of the ambassadors.” Jade said.

“I’m an ambassador.” Kovell said looking at him. “Personally, I’m not too excited about the fighting. I’m looking forward to meeting the Nameks. Have you ever met a Namek?” Kovell asked.

“Yeah once. He was really nice. Not the kind-of person you’d think could fight, but he was able to knock out a saiy-jin. He saved me. The Ulatie soldiers had taken over our town and were killing everyone. I was only 6 so I didn’t know how to fight, and of course, I had no parents. That Namek said he was coming to talk with the Ashina counsel, but he left after he killed those soldiers. To this day I don’t know who he was, but I’d really like to thank him for what he did.” Jade said. They all stopped at the entrance to the Starless.

“I’m sorry about what happened.” Ritina said. “Listen, don’t worry about it. Hey, did you say you were going to be on the front line?” Ritina asked trying to change the subject.

“Yeah. Why do you want to know?” Jade asked.

“I’m going to the front lines too. This is so neat! I thought I wouldn’t know anyone there, but now I do!” Ritina said.

“This is cool! If your going to hang with me on the front lines though, you’re going to have to back me up.” Jade said sticking his chest out.

“Can do.” Ritina said.

“Well, I guess the three of us are going to be together for a while.” Kovell looked at them. “Lets make a pact right now. No matter what happens, or where we end up, when this war is over we all meet here… alive.” Kovell said. She put her hand out in the middle of the three of them. Jade put his hand on top of hers smiling. Then Ritina put her hand on the other two.

“Deal.” Ritina smiled. At that they all walked onto the Starless talking and smiling. None of them knew how hard it was going to be, or if they might get killed, but they had their friendship. That was what was going to keep them alive, keep them fighting, and keep them together.

Thanks for taking your time to read this!